How does this profile look for a dating site?

**sarahlee20** · 10-22-2010 06:52 PM

Hi I am wondering how my profile looks. I am describing myself out there to possiably get a date. I want everyone's opinion I'd like to hear what people have have to say. thanks

Welcome to my profile! My name is sarah, I am 22 years old. I'm open for dating and friendship right now with the possiblity of something long-term.I recently started a new job at jcpenney.I took this semester off college to work my new job. My favorite types of music are country,alternative,pop and some rap.I think what makes me unique, is that I am a hard working person with a very caring heart and very honest.I feel I have a lot to offer a date as well as new friends too. The biggest turn offs for me would be being anti-social scarcastic and smoking.I am looking for someone who is family orenitated, mature,educated, kind, faithful,romantic,funny and outgoing and a hard worker.If this sounds like you, I'd enjoying hearing from you. I enjoy going to the movies,bowling,mini golf and concerts. Anything fun really.I'm looking for somebody to go out and do fun things with and make memories. If I find someone who fits good with me and my lifestyle then I'd like to persue it and see what happens! If any of this interests you then feel free to message me. I promise I'll write back. ;-) Thanks for reading!

**ItsASecret** · 10-22-2010 07:28 PM

Mention what you are going to school for, maybe not the exact program but mention the field like science, computing, law, social work etc. I am sure someone would be interested in knowing what has interested you enough to take it in college.

**CHANDLERS WISH** · 10-22-2010 07:32 PM

I am looking for someone who is family orenitated, mature,educated, kind, faithful,romantic,funny and outgoing and a hard worker.

None of that matters, sweet, if you are only after friendship, or a date and you may put a few guys off, by expecting them to be a hard worker, that means you want financial security

How about...

A bit about me...

I'm 22 years of age, full of life and outgoing..

I'm initially searching for friendship, off course you may be my knight in shining armour, so dating isn't out of the question.

I love country, alternative, pop and some rap, so I'm quite broad in the music department.

I'm currently working, but will still be attending some college...

My pet hates are few, but I'm non - judgemental, after all your who you are..

I love bowling, mini golf, laughing, concerts ... So if you have a sense of fun, a sense of humor and enjoy hanging out, let's give it a try...

If my profile is simular, drop me a line... I always reply..

Thanks Sarah.

**shweedart** · 10-23-2010 04:13 AM

Put some personality into it! The person reading it may be looking for someone fun and light hearted which isnt coming across in your profile...It reminds me of a CV.

Yes everything you've stated about yourself is lovely, honest and very becoming...but how would you really want to come across if you had the choice? Just name a profile, femme fatale, sweet and bubbly, girl next door, militant, innocent, cheeky?

Who knows, you may be all of the above but neither show.

**sarahlee20** · 10-23-2010 02:32 PM

thanks everyone! I will try revising it a bit! Thanks. I will try my luck. It's hard to put personality onto a profile isn't it? anyone ever done it before?

**sarahlee20** · 10-23-2010 02:55 PM

I revised it now. How does it look? I took a little bit of adivce from this lovely forum as well as added some of my own touches.

My name is Sarah! I'm 22 years of age,full of life and outgoing.I 'm initially searching for friendship,of course you may be my knight in shining armour ;-), so dating isn't out of the question.I think what makes me unique, is that I'm a hard working girl with a very giving heart and very honest.I feel I have a lot to offer a date as well as new friends.I love country, alternative, pop and some rap,so I'm quite broad in the music department.I'm currently working at jcpenney, but will still be attending some college next semester.I am a HUGE animal lover too!I also enjoy bowling, mini golf, laughing,concerts..So if you have a sense of humor and enjoy hanging out, let's give it a try! If my profile interests you, drop me a line.I always reply. Thanks! :banana:

**sarahlee20** · 10-23-2010 03:01 PM

CV? What's that?

**CHANDLERS WISH** · 10-23-2010 05:03 PM

That's better,

I wouldn't say where you are working, that's scary what if there's some idiot that try to locate which store?

CV is an application for employment...

I also tend to thing, "I'm very giving, honest, hard working" may attract guys who just want you to pay for everything

So, maybe even to change a little more of the CV appeal, fluff it up a bit, " I'd give you a run for your money, at bowling

That type of thing, add some fun into it, so the other person laughs a little when reading it.

**shweedart** · 10-23-2010 06:26 PM

Thats much better on the personality...I fancy you a little bit now

I joke! But yeah it made me smile

much much better.

And cv/resumé

As for the jcpenny thing (i dont know what jcpenny is...) but you could simply say you work in retail or sales for instance:
'I'm currently working for a well known retail company'